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Bastard [Jun. 2nd, 2006|05:08 pm]
Fast Fiction Friday

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[chiefseamonkey]
[Current Location |Keystone City, KS]
[music |Stars - Hum]

She offers me a cigarette. I take it, sitting up in her bed as I light it. She looks at me and smiles, slowly blowing smoke. I stare intently at the smoldering end of the cigarette. The night breeze from the open window dries the sweat on our skin.

With a laugh, she tells me I'm a bastard.

I don't disagree.

"I was kidding," she says. "You're a good guy."

Right.

"Look, there must be something wrong with your relationship if you're here with me."

No, I say. You were right the first time.
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[User Picture]From: hiebster
2006-06-02 11:06 pm (UTC)
Oh yeah, that's the stuff I'm hoping for here. The kind of tale or snippet that really makes you want to know the rest of the story.

Very satisfying.
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[User Picture]From: chiefseamonkey
2006-06-03 04:18 pm (UTC)
Thank you. I'm actually thinking of working this into a book I'm attempting to rewrite.
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[User Picture]From: hiebster
2006-06-03 04:24 pm (UTC)
Hm, I hope it's your own book you're attempting to rewrite. And if it isn't, awesome! Novel remakes = sweet.
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[User Picture]From: chiefseamonkey
2006-06-03 04:33 pm (UTC)
Yeah, it's mine. I wrote it a few years ago and sort of put it away, as I wasn't all that satisfied with the way it came out.
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